Hayley, You're an awesome writer, you have multiple (appropriate) film and theater references embedded within your script, combined with sharp dialogue and intricate scene description. This draft has a well balanced sense of action and dialogue, and it is easy to follow. I also enjoyed the stylistic choices like when Kate "glides" down the hallway after setting up her trap, this will definitely add a cinematic touch to the scene.
I applaud your vision and choice to keep the ending the same, I would only say that as well as the script is written, it makes me want a more resolved ending. But that's my personal taste. You have a really good film to make! Nicely done.
Hayley,
ReplyDeleteYou're an awesome writer, you have multiple (appropriate) film and theater references embedded within your script, combined with sharp dialogue and intricate scene description. This draft has a well balanced sense of action and dialogue, and it is easy to follow. I also enjoyed the stylistic choices like when Kate "glides" down the hallway after setting up her trap, this will definitely add a cinematic touch to the scene.
I applaud your vision and choice to keep the ending the same, I would only say that as well as the script is written, it makes me want a more resolved ending. But that's my personal taste. You have a really good film to make! Nicely done.