I applaud the fact that you are sticking to your vision. I know that your film is highly dependent on your visuals and because of that I think that it has great potential. After hearing your comments in class about working in your song in this movie, and then working a story around it, I think its going to work. Your film journal, gives me the impression that you have a specific look in mind for this film. Although I can only infer some things, I have some suggestions for you. I think one big thing you can play with is the color in your film. In the beginning, when your character is full of talent and potential, I think you should fill it with rich colors and as this changes you can desaturated it until he is fully talentless. Since this story is one that will need guidance, I think you can really use your visuals to help guide your audience. Also, I am very curious as to how you are going to show Lucifer. Since he is a devilish character, I am wondering if you are planning on taking a traditional take and dress him in red, or rather have him look another way. I think this is very important in your film, for it can make a difference from being cliche, to really driving your audience and engage them in the events that are taking place.
Like Jesus I like the fact that you are sticking to your vision, I think that it is a very bold choice, and one that I think is right making, the only problem with that is that now you have to make sure that you deliver on that vision. So here are my concerns, like Jesus said in this film the style and cinematography will be very important, I feel that you need to make sure that your shot selection is very meaningful and different, meaning that I think that it has to be a very stylistic film. Second I think that the way that you show Lucifer can completely kill your film, I think that if you got the wearing red with horns bit that your entire movie will fail because of it because it would lose credibility, my suggestion would be to make Lucifer a regular guy, kind of make him look like a salesman of sorts, you know slicked back hair, nice suit and when you look at him you think man this guy is a grade A sleaze ball. That way the audience can tell that he is evil but is not like wow really, horns and a pitchfork, nice but no thanks kind of a thing. I am curious to see what your costume design will look like in general for this film.
Since you didn’t change or add anything in your script my original opinion still stands. However, I would like to give you my opinion on you wanting to make this into a music video instead of a film, I personally feel like this would make an amazing film and if it were to be a music video you would have to eliminate almost all of the dialog which would take away from it.
Hey Neil, I like the visuals you put into the film journal. I think you'll be able to do a good job at creating lucifer if you steal some of the tricks from those movies. I think the way to go at this movie is not to stick completely to your original script or to make into a music video of sorts... do something in the middle. I think you should go all out with special effects and make it as visually stimulating as a music video but stick to the story you want to tell as well.
Thanks for the feedback, I made some subtle changes to the dialogue and description, but it was really just fine tuning. I will upload storyboards next submission to give everyone a better picture of what the project will consist of.
Neal,
ReplyDeleteI applaud the fact that you are sticking to your vision. I know that your film is highly dependent on your visuals and because of that I think that it has great potential. After hearing your comments in class about working in your song in this movie, and then working a story around it, I think its going to work. Your film journal, gives me the impression that you have a specific look in mind for this film. Although I can only infer some things, I have some suggestions for you. I think one big thing you can play with is the color in your film. In the beginning, when your character is full of talent and potential, I think you should fill it with rich colors and as this changes you can desaturated it until he is fully talentless. Since this story is one that will need guidance, I think you can really use your visuals to help guide your audience. Also, I am very curious as to how you are going to show Lucifer. Since he is a devilish character, I am wondering if you are planning on taking a traditional take and dress him in red, or rather have him look another way. I think this is very important in your film, for it can make a difference from being cliche, to really driving your audience and engage them in the events that are taking place.
Neal,
ReplyDeleteLike Jesus I like the fact that you are sticking to your vision, I think that it is a very bold choice, and one that I think is right making, the only problem with that is that now you have to make sure that you deliver on that vision. So here are my concerns, like Jesus said in this film the style and cinematography will be very important, I feel that you need to make sure that your shot selection is very meaningful and different, meaning that I think that it has to be a very stylistic film. Second I think that the way that you show Lucifer can completely kill your film, I think that if you got the wearing red with horns bit that your entire movie will fail because of it because it would lose credibility, my suggestion would be to make Lucifer a regular guy, kind of make him look like a salesman of sorts, you know slicked back hair, nice suit and when you look at him you think man this guy is a grade A sleaze ball. That way the audience can tell that he is evil but is not like wow really, horns and a pitchfork, nice but no thanks kind of a thing. I am curious to see what your costume design will look like in general for this film.
Since you didn’t change or add anything in your script my original opinion still stands. However, I would like to give you my opinion on you wanting to make this into a music video instead of a film, I personally feel like this would make an amazing film and if it were to be a music video you would have to eliminate almost all of the dialog which would take away from it.
ReplyDeleteHey Neil,
ReplyDeleteI like the visuals you put into the film journal. I think you'll be able to do a good job at creating lucifer if you steal some of the tricks from those movies. I think the way to go at this movie is not to stick completely to your original script or to make into a music video of sorts... do something in the middle. I think you should go all out with special effects and make it as visually stimulating as a music video but stick to the story you want to tell as well.
Thanks for the feedback, I made some subtle changes to the dialogue and description, but it was really just fine tuning. I will upload storyboards next submission to give everyone a better picture of what the project will consist of.
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